Friday Fictioneers – Johnathan’s Folly

Photo courtesy:  Douglas M. MacIlroy

Photo courtesy: Douglas M. MacIlroy

Johnathan’s Folly

Word count:  100

He used to say it looked like a robot with iridescent eyes and a yellow coat with the collars upturned. They had giggled, cuddled together, breathing fat balloons of air into the New Year night. A year later, Tina sat on the same bench, heartbroken; Johnathan was up there celebrating with his wife. The symmetry had been an illusion, and her lover had cast aside his folly to live life on a skating rink of lies.

Wretched, sobbing, Tina checked her watch and began the countdown….3, 2, 1…

The explosion rocked the city. No more robot. No more Johnathan.

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14 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Johnathan’s Folly

  1. There are a few about unrequited love this week… waiting and losing. This is really beautiful, painfully real in the way you put the words to it. “Breathing fat balloons of air into the New Year’s Ever night.” Gorgeous.

  2. Really good first line to this, it hookes me straight away. Then you told the backstory well in few words, with vivid images like the balloons and the skating rink. And a great unexpected ending too!
    Excellent take on the prompt!

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