Friday Fictioneers – Always Together

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Photo courtesy – Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Always Together

Word count:  100

 

Marcus and Jane hadn’t vacationed in years, so when Marcus’ grandfather died, leaving his grandson a substantial donation, the couple first invested in college funds for the kids.  Then they booked a holiday in Hawaii. It meant connections and long distances, but neither cared; they were kid-free and ready for alone time. They rested their eyes and sighed.

Abruptly, shouting erupted near the cockpit; urgent; demanding. The plane pitched downward.

Marcus had never felt such immediate, gripping fear. Strangers shrieked; wailing mothers hugged babies; a man with a bloody knife stumbled by.

Marcus clutched Jane until forces ripped them apart.

 

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21 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Always Together

  1. Dear Britlit,

    Your story is giving travel to Hawaii a bad name. Thanks. (There’s way too many visitors now.)

    Powerful piece, though. Gripping in its inevitable conclusion.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  2. Dear Britlight, Good story with a very happy start and a horrible finish. With all the unfortunate things in the news lately, it makes you wonder as to what mode of transportation is the safest. Nan 🙂

  3. Britlight, When you read about all the traffic accidents, the airplane accidients are far fewer. They just get the most press. Some business people have to fly regularly. How many people have the time and/or money to take a ship to go overseas? It just isn’t practical these days. Good and well-written story though. 🙂 —Susan

  4. This was a powerful piece and well written.With such tragic stuff in the press these days, I found myself hoping they would be OK, but then I’m a sucker for a happy ending.

    Dee

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