Friday Fictioneers : Model Playmate


Photo courtesy – Bjorn Rudberg

Model Playmate

Word Count:  102

Oh my god, she did it again! Milton breathe-slumped and rolled his eyes. He didn’t mind Penny playing in the basement, but how many times did he have to tell her not to touch the model?  Too many, he thought, tweezing the house back into its rightful location. And why did it always appear in this spot? Milton shrugged; eight year olds.

Upstairs, Milton’s wife felt ready to purge their daughter’s room of her belongings. It had been a difficult year but the time for grief was over.  She worried about Milton though; he seemed convinced that Penny still existed.



22 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers : Model Playmate

  1. Sad and possibly spooky. I’m interpreting this in one of two ways – either he’s moving the model himself and convincing himself it’s Penny, or Penny’s haunting the basement.
    Great story!

  2. The mother’s loss is clear, the father’s inability to accept also. Grief takes us all in different ways. One thing that stood out for me was the line ‘the time for grief was over’ – this just felt a little harsh and final, as if there would be no more remembering either.

  3. Grief taking the form of delusions…. sad to be overwhelmed to the point of losing reality.
    It must have been a terrible ending to have pushed him over the brink – or he was that fragile to begin with..

  4. Very well written. Fitting two different POVs into one piece isn’t easy but you managed it, and gave us some background into the story too. My thought was that Milton is moving the house himself, but the mystery makes this story so much better

  5. Geez! Excellent story even if it’s a sad subject – Seems the Mother is ready to move on and the Father doesn’t want to accept the fact of his daughters death. So very sad and this is probably a ghost story with an 8 year old little girl in the starring role! Good job! Nan 🙂

  6. Brit, I agree that this repeated behavior by the ghost is for a purpose. There is also the possibility the father is convinceing himself of the ghost’s presence. He still seems to be in mourning if the mother is right, so that’s definitely a possibility. This could go either way. Good story and well written. 🙂 —Susan

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