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The Wrong Walk
Word count: 99
It’s gone too far, she thought.
Melissa shielded her eyes from the sun, and squished Joe between thumb and forefinger as he stood at their altar in the distance.
“Melly honey, are you alright?”
She sniffed the warm air, sighed, and adjusted the dress, again.
“I dunno.”
The violin wafted around them, and danced away again. Joe must be wondering.
“Dad?”
“Yes?”
“Would you be disappointed if I called the whole thing off?”
“No… but you’d have some explaining to do.” He nodded toward Joe.
Revealing her love for another would be the toughest conversation of Melissa’s young life.
Spiritual Biscuits 
Worth making the effort though. Nicely done.
Thank you Sandra.
That’s going to be a tough one but better done than not. I love this, ” squished Joe between thumb and forefinger as he stood at their altar in the distance”, having done that sort of distance measuring before, although possibly not with squishing in mind.
janet
Thank you. I still squish people. 🙂
Brave decision. I love that line that Janet pointed out, too. But because you’ve just talked about Joe, and although he’s a long way off I thought the first person to speak was Joe. Just a thought.
Claire
Good point, thank you. 🙂
Great! I loved the bit about her perspective of Joe squished between the tips of her fingers. Your words put me right into the story.
Thank you!
I’m not sure I’d be brave enough to walk away at that point!
It takes a certain soul. 🙂
That action of squishing poor Joe between her fingers is such a telling one. Good story!
Thank you!
It won’t get any easier for her. Engaging story and memorable.
Thank you! I like that: memorable. 🙂
Dear Brit,
Better to make the crushing decision now than live a life filled with regret that would ultimately be more crushing to Joe. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle.
Good story. Better to call it off before the question was asked of someone to speak up if they saw any reason why the couple should not be united. That would be even more embarrassing. Good dialogue.
Thank you.
You’ve just got to do it or else suffer years of anguish.
I agree.
After having that revealing conversation with her dad, she has to call it off. I don’t know if I could do it. Wonderful take on the prompt!
Thank you!
That walk looks daunting, doesn’t it. I got flutters of nervousness in my stomach just stepping into the shoes of your narrator. Well done.
Thank you.
She was a coward to leave it till the last minute.
Better to do it now than on the walk back.
Good and sad. Better not to start than be deeply disappointed.
Regards
Jim
Love the squishing bit. Let’s hope Joe won’t be doing any splashing after she drops the bombshell. 🙂
Good to see “him” being left at the altar for a change 😉 Yes,she better tell him and hope for the best (Hopefully Joe will accept and not be hiding two or more bodies somewhere,lol)Good one 😀
Gorgeous, Brit… gorgeous! This is such a well written story; you had me totally lost in the words. That’s such a delicious place to be! Like others, I particularly loved the squishing between fingers… like squinting to see something different. GREAT job!
your story… very realistic and i can feel the turmoil of this young bride to be.
Uh oh! Run girl run! Very well told 🙂
Good to do it before the wedding. Good story! Nan